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[robinbloke]

Wage slave
Seconds slowly dying
All for the money

Comments

[uknc.livejournal.com]

Wrong number of syllables in the first and second lines.
To be Haiku, it needs 17 syllables.

Something like:

I am a Wage Slave
My seconds slowly dying
All for the money

Would work better.

[robinbloke.livejournal.com]

I am diabolical at counting syllables, or indeed even spelling the word;
I thought
Wage slave
2 3
Seconds slowly dying
3 2 2
All for the money
1 1 1 2

[karohemd.livejournal.com]

Wage and slave both have 1 syllable, whereas seconds has two...

[robinbloke.livejournal.com]

Told you I was cr@p at working out syllables.

To me its "way-jeh" "sl-ay-veh"

[jonnyargles.livejournal.com]

Yeah, if you're Rev. Lovejoy